Instructions
Write a short story of 100-200 words about
a trip to the doctor or dentist using the ABDCE structure. Check the Process section at this link. An example is reproduced
below:
One night when I was eight years old I
opened a bag of Doritos to eat while watching television. (A) Doritos were my
favorite snack to eat as a child. Nacho Cheese was my favorite flavor. (B) I
loved sitting in the dark hearing the “crunch, crunch, crunch” of the chips.
I’d sit there, crunching my chips, but didn’t eat the chips with a napkin (what
kid does?) and would forget about the powder that accumulated on my fingertips.
As it got later and I got sleepier, I kept rubbing my eyes, my fingertips
covered in Doritos Nacho Cheese powder. (D) When it was time for bed, I went to
brush my teeth, looked in the mirror, and saw two large bags under my eyes. The
Doritos Nacho Cheese powder had pooled into two large sacks underneath my
eyeballs. I started screaming and crying. (C) The next day, my grandmother took
me to the doctor who put industrial strength eye drops into my eyes to flush
out the powder. (E)
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Do something
Yesterday afternoon I was in the city
park, where I beat up two guys who were harassing a dog. (A) I grew up in an
infamous district, without rules or law in the streets, and I was too young for
fighting the gangs who killed animals for sport. (B) However, I could do
something that time, so I approached them. They were younger than I expected. I
told them to stop a few times, but they did not. Then I explained them that
harming defenseless animals is not funny but, as always, bullies were blind to
reason. (D) The anger inside me erupted and I ended up breaking them one finger
and two teeth. While I was watching them biting the dust, a big hand grabbed my
shoulder. A croaky voice told me that I had done well by punishing them, but I
had overdid. I barely saw a line of knuckles on a collision route with my left
eye. (C) When I woke up, a few minutes later, the little dog was licking my
forehead. I smiled at him, then I went to the nearest doctor office to recover
and heal the dog’s wounds. (E)
***Personal grade: 6.5/10***
Personal opinion. Another simple exercise, in which however is tested your synthesis ability to include in a few words all the sections of which a story is composed. Unfortunately, even doing the exercise correctly, it's hard to be satisfied of your own work when you are bounded to use such a small amount of words.
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