Friday, May 6, 2016

Writing exercise: Plot #2 ENG



Instructions

Write a short story of 100-200 words about a trip to the doctor or dentist using the ABDCE structure. Check the Process section at this link. An example is reproduced below:

One night when I was eight years old I opened a bag of Doritos to eat while watching television. (A) Doritos were my favorite snack to eat as a child. Nacho Cheese was my favorite flavor. (B) I loved sitting in the dark hearing the “crunch, crunch, crunch” of the chips. I’d sit there, crunching my chips, but didn’t eat the chips with a napkin (what kid does?) and would forget about the powder that accumulated on my fingertips. As it got later and I got sleepier, I kept rubbing my eyes, my fingertips covered in Doritos Nacho Cheese powder. (D) When it was time for bed, I went to brush my teeth, looked in the mirror, and saw two large bags under my eyes. The Doritos Nacho Cheese powder had pooled into two large sacks underneath my eyeballs. I started screaming and crying. (C) The next day, my grandmother took me to the doctor who put industrial strength eye drops into my eyes to flush out the powder. (E)

Remember, the action in this story isn’t the actual doctor’s office visit. The action is what LEADS you to the doctor’s office

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Do something

Yesterday afternoon I was in the city park, where I beat up two guys who were harassing a dog. (A) I grew up in an infamous district, without rules or law in the streets, and I was too young for fighting the gangs who killed animals for sport. (B) However, I could do something that time, so I approached them. They were younger than I expected. I told them to stop a few times, but they did not. Then I explained them that harming defenseless animals is not funny but, as always, bullies were blind to reason. (D) The anger inside me erupted and I ended up breaking them one finger and two teeth. While I was watching them biting the dust, a big hand grabbed my shoulder. A croaky voice told me that I had done well by punishing them, but I had overdid. I barely saw a line of knuckles on a collision route with my left eye. (C) When I woke up, a few minutes later, the little dog was licking my forehead. I smiled at him, then I went to the nearest doctor office to recover and heal the dog’s wounds. (E)

***Personal grade: 6.5/10***
Personal opinion. Another simple exercise, in which however is tested your synthesis ability to include in a few words all the sections of which a story is composed. Unfortunately, even doing the exercise correctly, it's hard to be satisfied of your own work when you are bounded to use such a small amount of words.

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