Friday, May 6, 2016

Esercizio di scrittura: Trama #2 ITA


Istruzioni

Scrivere una breve storia di 100-200 parole, riguardante una visita dal dottore o dal dentista, usando la strutture ABDCE. Controllare la sezione Process a questo link. Un esempio è riportato sotto:

Una notte, quando avevo otto anni, aprii un pacco di Doritos per mangiare mentre guardavo la televisione. (A) I Doritos erano il mio snack preferito quando ero piccolo. Quello dei nachos al formaggio era il sapore che preferivo. (B) Mi piaceva stare seduto al buio ascoltando il “crunch, crunch, crunch” delle patatine. Mi sedevo lì, masticando le mie patatine, ma non le mangiavo con un tovagliolo (quale ragazzo lo avrebbe fatto?) e mi dimenticavo delle briciole che si accumulavano sulla punta delle dita. Quando si fece tardi e io ero sempre più assonnato, continuavo a strofinarmi gli occhi, le dita coperte da briciole di Doritos al formaggio. (D) Quando fu ora di andare a letto, andai a lavarmi i denti, guardai nello specchio , e vidi due grandi borse sotto gli occhi. La polvere di Doritos al formaggio si era accumulata in due grandi sacche sottopelle proprio sotto i miei bulbi oculari. Cominciai a gridare e a piangere. (C) Il giorno successivo, mia nonna mi portò dal dottore che mi mise una quantità industriale di gocce negli occhi per lavare via le briciole. (E)

Ricorda, l’azione in questa storia non è la visita all’ufficio del dottore. L’azione è ciò che PORTA all’ufficio del dottore.

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Fare qualcosa


Ieri pomeriggio ero al parco cittadino, dove ho sistemato due ragazzi che stavano dando fastidio a un cane. (A) Sono cresciuto in un quartiere malfamato, senza regole o legge per le strade, e io ero troppo giovane per combattere contro i gruppi che ammazzavano animali per divertimento. (B) Comunque quella volta potevo fare qualcosa, quindi mi avvicinai a loro. Erano più giovani di quanto mi aspettassi. Gli dissi di smetterla un paio di volte, ma non lo fecero. Allora gli spiegai che far male a degli animali indifesi non era divertente ma, come sempre, i bulli rimasero ciechi alla ragione. (D) La rabbia dentro di me esplose e finii per rompergli un dito e due denti. Mentre li osservavo mangiare la polvere, una grossa mano mi afferrò per la spalla. Una voce roca mi disse che avevo fatto bene a punirli, ma che avevo esagerato. Vidi a stento una fila di nocche in rotta di collisione con il mio occhio sinistro. (C) Quando mi svegliai, pochi minuti dopo, il cagnolino mi stava leccando la fronte. Gli sorrisi, quindi andai dal dottore più vicino per riprendermi e guarire le ferite del cane. (E)

***Voto personale: 6.5/10***
Parere personale. Un altro esercizio molto semplice, nel quale tuttavia viene testata la capacità di sintesi per racchiudere in poche parole tutte le parti di cui una storia deve essere composta. Purtroppo anche avendo fatto bene l'esercizio è difficile essere soddisfatti del proprio lavoro quando si è vincolati ad un numero tanto ridotto di parole da usare.
 

Wednesday, May 4, 2016

Writing exercise: Plot #1 ENG



Instructions

Imagine a character and write a max of 250 words where every sentence is a rising action. Write your first sentence introducing the character using one of the following twelve words. Make the next sentence a rising action, write your third sentence, then write your fourth sentence with a rising action that includes one of the remaining eleven words you haven’t used.
Try to use as many words as possible. 


  • trick
  • memory
  • aboard
  • tiger
  • pretend
  • carrot
  • appliance
  • cage
  • rings
  • crow
  • filthy
  • explode

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Jin, the deceiver painter 


Jin is a beautiful, handsome man, with long golden hair and blue eyes, who pretends to be a great artist.
But the truth is he is a mischievous deceiver, who relies on tricks, scams and frauds to dupe naive people.
He once fooled an old merchant, trading a carrot, which he said it was a magic wand, with a horse.
During his journey, he met a witch to whom he sold a wooden appliance. “It’s a powerful artifact!” he said.
The witch recognized the lie and closed Jin in a cage, segregating him in a hidden cave into the woods.
After days of imprisonment, while the witch was preparing a potion her caldron exploded and part of the cage melted.
Jin grabbed a small sack full of a red powder and blew it against the witch, who lost her memories.
Then he stole her five Rings of Randomness, each one made of a different material: silver, gold, platinum, mercury, osmium.
Suddenly, a random magic triggered: Jin became a crow and flew to the nearest city, where he came back human.
He went to the docks where he saw a small boat, in bad conditions, with an enormous tiger as figurehead.
«Who is the captain of this filthy cockleshell? My name is Jin, artist and painter, sorcerer and hero!» he shout.
No man was in sight when a creepy, rough voice replied: «Take aboard that offensive tongue of yours, young man».


***Personal grade: 6.5/10***
Personal opinion. A simple exercise, where you can choose to use less words and write more to reach the 250 words, or write shorter sentences using all the words. In this last case it's harder to obtain a coherent and sensible story,because many words are not connected to the others.

Esercizio di scrittura: Trama #1 ITA



Istruzioni

Immaginare un personaggio e scrivere massimo 250 parole dove ogni frase è un crescendo. Scrivere la prima frase per introdurre il personaggio usando una delle seguenti dodici parole. Fare della frase successiva un crescendo, scrivere una terza frase, quindi una quarta come un crescendo che includa una delle undici parole rimaste non ancora usate.
Si cerchi di usare il maggior numero possibile di parole.
  • trucco
  • memoria
  • a bordo
  • tigre
  • fingere
  • carota
  • apparecchio
  • gabbia
  • anello
  • corvo
  • sudicio
  • esplodere

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Jin, il pittore ingannatore


Jin è un uomo bello e affascinante, con lunghi capelli Dorati e occhi blu, che finge di essere un grande artista.
Ma la verità è che lui è un imbroglione malizioso, che fa affidamento su trucchi, imbrogli e truffe per ingannare i creduloni.
Una volta ha imbrogliato un vecchio mercante, scambiando una carota, che diceva essere una bacchetta magica, per un cavallo.
Durante il suo viaggio, ha incontrato una strega alla quale vendetta un apparecchio di legno. “È un artefatto potente!” disse.
La strega riconobbe l’inganno e rinchiuse Jin in una gabbia, segregandolo in una caverna nascosta nei boschi.
Dopo giorni di prigionia, mentre la strega stava preparando una pozione, il suo calderone esplose e parte della gabbia venne fusa.
Jin afferrò una piccola sacca piena di una polvere rossa e la soffiò contro la strega, che perse la memoria.
Quindi rubò i suoi cinque Anelli della Casualità, ognuno fatto di un diverso materiale: argento, oro, platino, mercurio, osmio.
All’improvviso, si attivò una magia casuale: Jin divenne un corvo e volò fino alla città più vicina, dove ritornò umano.
Andò al molo dove vide una piccola barca, in cattive condizioni, con un’enorme tigre come polena.
«Chi è il capitano di questo sudicio guscio di noce? Il mio nome è Jin, artista e pittore, stregone ed eroe!» gridò.
Non si vedeva nessun uomo quando una voce paurosa e rude replicò: «Porta a bordo quella tua linguaccia, giovane».

***Voto personale: 6.5/10***
Parere personale. Un esercizio semplice, nel quale si può scegliere di usare meno parole e scrivere di più per raggiungere le 250 parole, oppure scrivere frasi brevi usando tutte le parole. In quest'ultimo caso è più difficile ottenere una storia coerente e sensata perché molte parole non sono legate alle altre.

Saturday, March 12, 2016

Aurelion_Sol_The_Star_Forger_ENG



Aurelion Sol

Wonder imprisoned

Five cloaked men were traveling along one of the side slopes of Mount Targon. Their climb was not difficult as that which awaits those who venture out in search of wonder, on the cusp of the mountain. Not at all. The golden symbols on their crimson hoods testified they belonged to the tribe of the Solari. They lived in the majestic citadel on the eastern slopes of the sacred mountain, and knew the less tortuous roads to move on.
That night, the torches they carried emitted an absolutely redundant light. Never before the stars were so bright and luminous. The huge clouds that were traveling in the night sky had no hope of weakening the glare of the stars. The priests went on a wide, semi-circular terrace of smooth stone, decorated with runes carved everywhere into the rock. Two groups arranged themselves at the ends of the terrace; one man stood at the center, a few centimeters away from a dark abyss, which end could not be seen.
Raised his arms to heaven, the priest lifted his head upward. Under the large hood, hemmed with golden filaments, only his lips were visible, from which came prayers of invocation.
«Oh, greatest dragon! God of light and of all that it is lighted, come down on us with your mercy!»
He pleaded for a long time, more than he had done the night before, and all the previous ones. The stars were still shining, but remained mute.
The man sighed, disheartened. He had already given up hope when, suddenly, the veil of the night was rent by a gargantuan claw. The sinuous forms of a celestial creature was designed by continuously approaching constellations. When the divinity ended his descent, with his enormous size he had occupied entirely the boundless ravine of Mount Targon.
The four men at the sides of the terrace rejoiced, proud and honored of their success: the appearance of the god was the unexpected gift which everyone had hoped for.
The creature's eyes, blue as the flaming heart of the first stars, rested, haughty, on his worshipers. Around the body of the dragon, out of nowhere, three small stars appeared. The force of gravity generated removed the hoods, which still covered the faces of the humans, while the glowing light illuminated them.
The man at the center, whose face was half disfigured by horrible burns, bowed, begging forgiveness for their lack of respect. All the others did the same. Then the gravitational force of newborn stars faded, and those began to orbit the divinity.
The priest with the burned face began to speak. He said how long he had waited for that moment to arrive, in order to have the opportunity to pay homage to the god dragon with a gift worthy of his magnificence.
«A gift?» were the first words uttered by Aurelion Sol, «I already have everything I want. The galaxies I visited will die before you can imagine that they've ever existed. I have created what you venerate. You do not have any gift worthy of my interest.»
When the creature turned around, to go back in the infinite vastness of the cosmos, the priest with the burned face created a fireball that hurled against the divinity. The flames disappeared into the darkness of its serpentine body, not causing him any harm.
Aurelion Sol spun around, angrily. The orbit of the stars around him suddenly widened, and the stars burned the four priests at the far ends of the terrace. The last man alive knelt down again, bowing his head and turning his disfigured face to the stone floor.
«Four sacrifices, supreme God of all gods. Have mercy on me. Please, give us a little of your infinite time, and honor us by accepting our gift.»
The heavenly creature laughed inwardly. “The thing they do best, as always, is beg for mercy” he thought.
He agreed to follow the last priest left, who took him at the base of Mount Targon. The clearing was kissed by the bright light of the stars, which lit a multitude of altars, disposed irregularly. The man went up a circular staircase, to reach the top of the central altar, while Aurelion Sol showed disappointment.
While the priest with the burned face explained that those structures had been erected during the First Rune War, a large number of Solari went, quietly, to occupy the tops of other altars. When they were all in place, the first priest began to perform an ancient and complex ritual. Hidden runes, scattered throughout the area, were covered by a red pulsating light. Whoever had carved them, he had had such a great power that it survived, despite the passing of eons.
A sphere of arcane energy surrounded Aurelion Sol. Inside of it, enormous magical chains forced him to the ground. Among his clawed fingers, stiffen with rage, the dragon created two stars that hurled against the crimson prison, but could not break free. As he got up, around him enchanted walls appeared, decorated with runes older than time, which embraced him up, to sealing him completely.
«Free Me, miserable inferior beings!» boomed the god, «What have you done? I am the forger of the stars. I am life, fury and wonder! I am the one who talks as the galaxies obey!»
«Lend us your power, oh great and arrogant divinity» said the priest with the burned face.
Aurelion Sol pointed at him, his eyes fiery, moving closer to the man as much as possible.
«My power is nothing, far from the skies. Free me from these restrictions, and I will give you what you ask» he hissed.
The priest sneered.
«If you went back to the stars, oh divine, I do not think you'd be merciful as you say. No. The power you possess right now will be more than enough»
«For what purpose?» asked the dragon, forced to bow to that blackmail.
The sense of joy felt by the man, for the victory he conquered, was equal to the frustration and the anger that pervaded the heavenly creature. Both hid their emotions, appearing unperturbed.
«You will fight at the service of the summoners of Mount Targon. You will devastate the League of Legends, with your unstoppable rage. Thanks to you, the power of the Solari will be consolidated once and for all. Nobody, in Runeterra, will oppose us.»
The god was impassive, after witnessing the delirium of omnipotence of the priest. He reduced his glorious voice to a whisper, so that only the man with the burned face could hear him.
«When this will be over, instead of this ridiculous prison I will create a new sun, just like the one you worship. The fire of the stars will consume you all.»
Aurelion Sol once graced the vast emptiness of the cosmos with celestial wonders of his own devising. Now, he is forced to wield his awesome power at the behest of an empire that tricked him into servitude.
Desiring a return to his star-forging ways, Aurelion Sol will drag the very stars from the sky, if he must, in order to regain his freedom.